Thursday, 29 October 2015
Sunday, 11 October 2015
Chapter three the Battle 4 the calnthx jazzie-kun 4 th good review! and stop flmaing the stroy!
1 i bet u cant right such a good story!1!1
Wanna bet?StarPaw walkd over too the appentice's den. Insid she saw her sister's FlamePaw and lakePaw and hr frend JazzPaw (a.n: jazzie-kin ur my bff!) waz slepping on the mos.
So Flamepaw, is her sisters 'special' flamepaw. idk what i just typed.
"JazzPaw get up." She cried. JazzPaw opend her brlliaint blu eyes and looked at hr.
Darkrose , you mean her."Do yo want 2 go on pattrol wit me?" she asked.
Because cats obviously use text-talk"Sure!" Said JazzPaw getten up from the moss. They leavt and went two the entrnse too camp.But then, a cat came in thru the entrnce! It was BlackStar!1!11
O.o"Shadowclan are attaking!" She yelled. All the cats came out from there dens. She jumped on a cat and clawd him and he ran of.
The mary-sue can kill . I did not guess that."Good job StarPaw!" FireStar called, "The last cat i new that culd fiht lik that was SandStrom. Your a good fihter!"
I struggle to belive thisStarPaw was happy. She wus a good fihgter! Maybey this was wat the prophcy meant.
Watthnkx and ples no more flams
Falme her
Wednesday, 30 September 2015
The worst fanficton ever:prologe[ which is spelt wrong]
Chpater oen prouloge
The author dosent care much if she spelt THIS wrong
The cats gathered around a pool. They all looked into it eagerly.
Is it the moonpool? Or some other , unspecified pool. Tell me starkit , i'm dyeing to know!
A dark shape appeared on the surface. A blue she cat looked up. Her eyes were bright.
Who Is This cat??????????? And why are her eyes magicly bright???
"There is a prophecy!" She said. "out of the darkness, stars will come and get rid of the evil tiger and holly."
OHHHHH , I have absoloutly NO idea what this is about!Its obviously NOT about Starkit, Tigerstar and Hollyleaf. Not at all.
"Its about StarKit!" A white tom said. "Shes going to save the forest,"
You ruined my guessing game. I hate you strange tom.[ not really Whitestorm, you are sweggy]
He looked at a gold tom by BlueStar.
Why is Bluestar BlueStar? Is she actually a Blue Star?? Or a she-cat who looks like this:
"she has powers nobody dreamed of." Said the gold tom. "Should we tell
JayFeather?" He asked. "Yes." Said BlueStar. "he needs to know."
Oh , what are the powers? The power to be a Mary Sue , obviously.
She walked away from the pool to tell JayFeather about the prophcy.
Who is JayFeather?In this weird Fanfic, Jayfeather is NOT the Jayfeather we know and love. He is NOT grumpy. And he forgets about Briarlight and Half-Moon .
did u like it? plz tell me in urm comment!
The author dosent care much if she spelt THIS wrong
The cats gathered around a pool. They all looked into it eagerly.
Is it the moonpool? Or some other , unspecified pool. Tell me starkit , i'm dyeing to know!
A dark shape appeared on the surface. A blue she cat looked up. Her eyes were bright.
Who Is This cat??????????? And why are her eyes magicly bright???
"There is a prophecy!" She said. "out of the darkness, stars will come and get rid of the evil tiger and holly."
OHHHHH , I have absoloutly NO idea what this is about!Its obviously NOT about Starkit, Tigerstar and Hollyleaf. Not at all.
"Its about StarKit!" A white tom said. "Shes going to save the forest,"
You ruined my guessing game. I hate you strange tom.[ not really Whitestorm, you are sweggy]
He looked at a gold tom by BlueStar.
Why is Bluestar BlueStar? Is she actually a Blue Star?? Or a she-cat who looks like this:"she has powers nobody dreamed of." Said the gold tom. "Should we tell
JayFeather?" He asked. "Yes." Said BlueStar. "he needs to know."
Oh , what are the powers? The power to be a Mary Sue , obviously.
She walked away from the pool to tell JayFeather about the prophcy.
Who is JayFeather?In this weird Fanfic, Jayfeather is NOT the Jayfeather we know and love. He is NOT grumpy. And he forgets about Briarlight and Half-Moon .
did u like it? plz tell me in urm comment!
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